Welcome to Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors! Both are groups of authors that share snippets of their writing every weekend. I usually only have time for one group but in this time of COVID-19, shelter-in-place, I seem to have a few more hours in the day. :-) This is the second part of an angsty scene in my debut novel, Take Two. This is towards the middle of the book and takes place in Costa Rica. Rachel and Roger were set up by their best friends to be on the same overnight river-rafting trip. Before this, they hadn't seen one another for a few months. I'm pretty sure it's easy to follow along, but if you like, here's the previous snippet: https://www.karysafaire.com/blog/a-midnight-visit-snippetsunday Enjoy! And please be sure to visit the other amazing authors at the links above! Roger opened the door and came over to the bed, emerging from the shadows. His shorts sat low on his waist, his bare chest as defined and delicious as she remembered. He sat down facing her and leaned against her bent legs. This close to him, the heat poured off his body, bleeding through the thin sheet to her vulnerable, bare skin. “What are you doing here, Roger?” “That's what I'm wonderin’." Roger reached out his hand and lightly touched her injured shoulder. “How's it holdin’ up?” She sighed - she could play this game of talking but not really talking. “Not too bad, thanks. The story will last a lot longer than the discomfort.” Take TwoIs their love real or fiction? Rachel is a teacher and a single mom who’s picked up the pieces of her life after a horrible marriage. She’d thought her ex-husband was the man of her dreams. He wasn’t. She’s moved on and written a historical romance novel, Swashbuckler, that’s been picked up by Hollywood. Roger is an actor who doesn’t trust women. He’s made bad choices in his past that have come to haunt him in the present, especially the choice that came packaged with blonde hair, large tits, and a marriage that was doomed from the start. Roger thought they were in love—turns out his wife was a social-climber more interested in his status than his heart. He doubts there is a woman alive who can love him for who he is, and not for his fame or for the fantasy he presents to the world. Both Rachel and Roger have been burned by love, trusting a reality that turned out only to be fantasy. Will their fear succeed at keeping them apart? Or will they break through the barriers and allow themselves to love once again? After all, sometimes reality is much sweeter than fantasy.
11 Comments
3/28/2020 08:37:09 pm
I really like that last line. And I like how she pegs his talking but not really talking game. Nicely done! :-)
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iris
3/28/2020 10:39:59 pm
The awkward talk but not saying anything situation. Liked the snippet
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3/29/2020 12:22:36 am
I think we all know the kind of awkwardness she's talking about.
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Charmaine Gordon
3/29/2020 07:19:00 am
Fascinating between them as if romance is about to happen.
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3/29/2020 07:52:42 am
Very nice!! Wiping my brow from all the sexual tension . . .
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3/29/2020 09:44:44 am
Good to know the discomfort won't last too long. Intriguing snippet!
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3/29/2020 06:03:43 pm
Yowza! I loved the steamy scene. And I liked how she picked up on him not wanting to talk about things that matter so she’d beat him at his own game.
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3/29/2020 08:55:25 pm
I have a hunch why he's there. Great last line.
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3/30/2020 02:33:15 pm
Love that last line. Great description of him. I can feel the tension between them. Good job.
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3/31/2020 03:54:22 pm
Enjoyed the excerpt - SO true you can have a conversation that isn't really talking about things that matter. Great snippet.
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10/20/2022 05:00:43 pm
Teacher she player take. Than believe year everything herself far boy.
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